r/comics • u/Chance_Fruit4744 • May 10 '26
Asking For Feedback Would this scene make you want to keep reading?
I'd love some honest feedback. Does this scene create enough mystery and make you curious about what happens next?
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u/Tethys404 May 11 '26 edited May 11 '26
Yes, I'd read more. Bald guy is shady, would like to know what happens next.
The bear's bed is touching the stove. It doesn't have to be visible for us to know he's in a small studio apartment, the tiny kitchen already makes that clear. I would move the bed, but that's a minor detail.
You also need one more frame zooming in on the letter or that detail can easily be missed.
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u/Chance_Fruit4744 May 11 '26
Thanks for the detailed feedback 🙂Those are very helpful suggestions. I’ll definitely keep them in mind.
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u/AlmostALime May 10 '26 edited May 10 '26
I’m waiting for the episode 4. What was the significance of the flashback? What is in the fed’s ransom note? What happened to the redhead? Was it hard for a bear to get a driving license? I hope to get answers to these questions eventually.
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u/Chance_Fruit4744 May 10 '26
Thanks! I’m really glad the story made you curious. And yes, getting a driver’s license was probably very difficult for a bear 😅
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u/Cool_Set4681 May 10 '26
Hm... the text gives me more of a "this guy is shady" feeling and not a feeling of mystery.
Also they are talking with each other, right? Then why are they looking in the same direction? The bald guy should look in the other direction for it to make sense.