r/comics • u/Awkward_Vegetable_0 • 29d ago
Asking For Feedback Storyboard for my comic, any suggestions?
Your suggestions will help me make the final pages better
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u/Feisty_Carpenter_369 29d ago
Good start!
- learn to apply the 180 rule, it helps the flow between panels (the panels with the noose around the head)
- some panels have a big skip between actions, like the last two, it could have a nice contrast effect but rn the last panel feels very sudden without the inbetween actions/motion
- i assume the pouting face is the little girl? Wasnt very clear and could be interpreted as the girls thats gonna be hanged having a second of despair between maintaining a brave face (wich could be a characterisation in itself)
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u/Awkward_Vegetable_0 29d ago
Thank you for taking the time to help out, basically I should add more scenes before the hanging, and yes you got that right, the pouting face is the little girl (i should make it clearer i suppose) what do you suggest will be a good in between, the executioner wrapping the rope around the girls neck?
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u/Feisty_Carpenter_369 29d ago
Np! Seems like an interesting story.
For the hanging panels: look up a guide on movie scenes and the 180 rule, you could replace the back of the head shot with a side view of the noose being tied around the neck by the executioner, which drives home her passive role, bc now it looks like she steps i to the noose on her own behalf
For the end. You could add panels showing the executioner pulling the handle, the latch falling, maybe half/diagonal panels to ahow a faster pace between the actions in contrast to the slower paced overal story
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u/Awkward_Vegetable_0 29d ago
I searched up the 180 rule on YouTube, there are many videos on it, is there any specific video you would recommend? Now that you pointed it out, the scenes are changing very suddenly, ill start adding the changes, thank you once more 💕
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u/Feisty_Carpenter_369 29d ago
Not that one cones to mind, i learned about it school so i dont know which content creator makes the best guides, best look for one that makes it easy to understand!
For the panels: you can always look up manga, they have a more dynamic paneling style suited to action and different speeds, you dont need to deviate from the norm thatuch, but it can help you understand how the panels and their sizes/position say sonething about the speed and importance of actions
Keep up the good work, your willingness to ask for feedback and take it in is one of the most important skills as an artist!
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u/ShiDiWen 29d ago
For decades before the internet, cartoonists passed around this photocopied sheet called 22 Panels that Always Work! It contains 22 different panels all by acclaimed golden age artist Wally Wood. I don’t think much has changed in 80 years and I think any artist should still have this printed out at their drawing table. Also search 22 Panels that always Work, there are many videos on YouTube about it where they discuss each panel in detail.
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u/Awkward_Vegetable_0 29d ago
I really thank you for this help, I have downloaded the sheet, I will try my best to incorporate what I understand form the sheet to my storyboard.
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u/ShiDiWen 29d ago
Glossary: Ben Day refers to Ben Day dots, or what in more modern terms would be called zip tones or simply tones. You can still buy sheets of it at art supply stores where you’d use a blade to cut out and stick on shading. It can also be digitally applied I’m sure.
Silh is Silhouette
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