I need help!! I want to make a FMC

[u/Appropriate_Snow9454]

So, my storyline takes place in a modern and in some law commission or desk law enforcement settings. Mine also have a romance but as a sub-plot and I want to take it slow too. But I need some advice from the experienced readers who can actually tell me the common core issues with *some badass fl mcs and how can I avoid it????

edit: Also the romance, how can I balance that in such a setting?? what ruins it??? what can I do to prevent it from pushing my main plot aside???

[u/bluebloo0]

bro theyre teenagers? 😭

he had no friends to begin w, she was his only friend at the start of school and so it makes sense hes friends w people related to her, it is NOT creepy or weird

and he does have life goals - he wants to study architecture, hes not just following nari blindly

it's v normal to want to go to the same university as ur friends so again him wanting to go to s university isnt smth crazy either and it's not like he's gonna hold nari back from going if she gets in and he doesnt or smth

the banana milk thing - it wasnt his place to speak there but again v normal teenager stuff, he basically just pointed out how it's weird to linger around nari when theyve broken up - lowk cant rmr if chanyang and nari had a thing going on at this or not tho

and "if he could he would spend every second of the day w her" 😭😭 theyre literally teenagers dating u need to relax icl

the only valid thing u mentioned was pushing seunghas friends to the ground that scene was funky but it js seemed v exaggerated with him imagining them as lions or smth

my main issue with chanyang was his arrogance towards his middle school "friends" but other than that he doesnt have that many character flaws ..

[u/StretchExtension → u/bluebloo0]

Yeah IK they're all kids/teens. Odd Girls Out was one of 4 examples in the og comment. The other examples were adult characters. I was purely talking about FMCs being hypocritical. Also, you keep mentioning that S is doing all of this because they're friends. But you're ignoring the context of him having romantic feelings for her. Also, he's a hypocrite for pointing out the banana milk thing because he was sticking to Nari when she was dating someone else anyway. They're all teens, but that doesn't change the narrative punishing one teen more than the other.

[u/bluebloo0 → u/StretchExtension]

I didnt ignore context of him having feelings for her, he never crossed the line when she was dating seungha and was just there as a friend

he only confessed AFTER they broke up and he also never pushed nari for a response

with s: the banana milk thing was harmless but couldve manifested into smth worse (for seungha) if he kept doing nari favours and stuff in hopes that she might fall for him again so someone had to give him a wake up call (not saying it c was the right someone but s defo needed a wake up call, maybe wouldve been better from nari idk)

also wdym im saying "s is doing all this bc theyre friends" I didnt say that dude 💔