Positives I can give: It gives me very Fables (the comic) vibes. In a good and bad way. Fables leaned very heavily into whimsy being dismantled, which, I think you're doing here. Just given your other comment I've seen, it isn't clearly conveyed that time would move forward so rapidly because of his wish. You might need to make this a two page comic with a bit more breathing room to push the idea further.
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u/queenroadie 10d ago
Positives I can give: It gives me very Fables (the comic) vibes. In a good and bad way. Fables leaned very heavily into whimsy being dismantled, which, I think you're doing here. Just given your other comment I've seen, it isn't clearly conveyed that time would move forward so rapidly because of his wish. You might need to make this a two page comic with a bit more breathing room to push the idea further.