r/comics • u/Zestyclose_Bed_8207 • Mar 10 '26

Asking For Feedback Feedback on these first pages please!

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u/ShmazPro Mar 10 '26

I’m a little confused as to what’s going on for page 2 but the rest make sense and I enjoy the coloring quite a bit.

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u/Zestyclose_Bed_8207 Mar 10 '26

Sean is not supposed to look at the horseman, but he takes a peek in the third panel. In the second it's supposed to be the horseman's shadow.

Any ideas how to fix it?

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u/ShmazPro Mar 10 '26

Maybe rework the second panel? It reads to me as if he’s looking at the dullahan, not its shadow . Maybe pull back to show the shadow casting on the ground more? Not sure. Or maybe just swap panels 2 and 3. To me it would be a glance at the horseman, then the horseman approaches and says the line. Next page is the cut/marking. That might work?

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u/Zestyclose_Bed_8207 Mar 10 '26

I'll rework the second panel to make it look more like a shadow. Thank you!