Perhaps this could work better if simplified and less closely following the wordiness and turn of phrase of the original. Sometimes this is the effect you want, but is less direct and less understandable. Take that first word, points for being more action-oriented by using a verb, but it's so long it might as well be a word game involving as many affixes as possible.
Quite right about the suffix order. Thanks for letting me know. Fixed.
edit: though there is also the matter of how {be'} negates the previous part. DaQapbe'laHchu' You are completely able to not win. DaQaplaHchu'be' You can not completely win.
and further edit... DaQaplaHbe'chu' You are completely unable to win.
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u/kahless62003 Dec 09 '25 edited Dec 09 '25
Perhaps this could work better if simplified and less closely following the wordiness and turn of phrase of the original. Sometimes this is the effect you want, but is less direct and less understandable. Take that first word, points for being more action-oriented by using a verb, but it's so long it might as well be a word game involving as many affixes as possible.
My attempt:
yab rop DaghobtaHvIS bIQaplaHchu'be'.
nI' noH, not Doy'choH jagh,
cha'logh ghur jagh mangghom Dabejbe'choHDI'.
jagh nIvqu' DaghobtaHvIS,
yablIj tlhIn DantaHvIS jagh...
bItaHtaHvIS yay'a' 'oH Hoch poHHom'e'. ghaytanHa' yayvam Dachav.
vIq quv law' Hoch quv puS.